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Dark as Knight by lordnickage Dark as Knight by lordnickage
Page 7 of my ongoing web comic, "Master Sensei and the Dojo of Doom"!

Check out the whole comic at doomdojo.com updated Mondays!

As always, feedback is appreciated! Thanks!  

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fitnesstic4 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So I read the whole comic on your doomdojo.com website (up to "Harsh Lessons" part 2) and it's not bad. The overall artwork is pretty good (action scenes, camera angles, color). I see that it was influenced by Naruto and some DragonBall Z influences in a chibi-manga style. I like the small injection of rhetorical questions asked and the added self-referential humor to help break up the pace of the comic a bit. Well done. I do have a few critiques though. Why is Billy named Tubby? Is he fat? The order of which characters speak in the thought bubbles were a little confusing at times. Perhaps you can have the bubbles overlap each other in a top-left to top-right, then bottom-left to bottom-right pattern, so it's easier for the reader to follow. Also just like my comic, maybe you can have a link in the description of each page to go to the next page of your comic. I'm aware the uploading to DeviantArt is a little messy, but having a posted link to the next page will make it easier to read your comic on DeviantArt. Overall, I like the balance of narrative and action in your comic. I understand the storyline and the student-teacher/martial-arts/demon theme is intriguing. I look forward to more in the future! :)
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Wow, thank you very much for the input! Yeah, I wanted to depict Billy as a little more chubby, but maybe I'll exaggerate the proportions more to make it more apparent, or play it up on his face more.

I'll also definitely be more mindful of the lettering and try to place the speech/thought bubbles more carefully.

I upload on Mondays (just posted "Harsh Lessons part 3" this week), but I'll really make an effort to step up this advice going forward.

As for what's posted on here, I'll see about slowly adding links to the next page to make it easier to read on DA.

I really appreciate the feedback, and it means a lot to hear from someone. My friends usually just say "it's great keep it up!" Don't get me wrong it feels amazing, but it's also great to get some beefy critiques to help me improve.
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fitnesstic4 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Happy to give positive feedback lordnickage! If you can do me a favor and also give me feedback on my comic that would be fantastic. Glad to give "beefy" critiques (read my comic to understand the pun :) )
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
I really liked the dark and gritty origin story. Beef came from some pretty humble beginnings, and things quickly spiraled out of control!

It was an enjoyable read, and I'm waiting to see how his "beef" with Marquis is resolved!

The art is very stylized and consistent, and you're very ambitious with a lot of the action shots.

The only thing I would change is trying to pace the dialogue/text boxes more. There's a lot of words in there, so you spend a lot of time reading then looking at the art, instead of taking it all in at once. Try to let it guide the eyes through the panel. (Something I try to do, and have been failing at so far--but try I shall!)

Looking forward to reading more, bud =) Keep up the great work!
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fitnesstic4 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That was a great review of my comic lordnickage. Thank you very much! I'll take that into account for the next comic in the series.
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Anytime, bud! Looking forward to more!
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Laverkyn Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
scary af knight vs dem nerdies
i like the knight's design!
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Oh, thank you very much! =) I'm glad you like it. I have the full comic online, but I'll keep posting it on here too, little by little.
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Laverkyn Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
alright C:
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Yeah, check out doomdojo.com and let me know what you think.

So far, only my friends have given me feedback and it's so great to have their support but an unbiased opinion would be great. Thanks!
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Laverkyn Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
the website looks pretty good to me actually C:
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Oh thank you! Was the comic enjoyable?
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Laverkyn Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I havent had time to look at alot of pages but its fun i gotta say c:
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lordnickage Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Wow, thank you! =) I really appreciate the feedback, and it means a lot to me that someone enjoys it!
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